WALT use adjectives in our tuhituhi to make it more interesting
Chapter 1
He arrived at the surface of the water and took a refreshing breath of air. Whilst keeping his body completely still, he glanced around the swamp with large, circular, green eyes.
After several moments, he slipped his enormous body beneath the surface of the water once again, and slithered off in search of food..
Chapter 2
Me and my friends Yzazmin and Misty-rose were on a walk and then we saw a house and a Swamp. so Misty-rose and Yazmin said “did you get our swimming togs so we can go swimming in the swamp” i said “yes but i do not want to swim''. “Ok” said yazmin and misty-rose then misty-rose said “where are we going to get in are togs” i said “ right behind the tree”. “Ok” said Yazmin but before Yazmin went into the swamp she really needed to pee then she went fear away and peed in the swamp , 2 hours later being swimming we wanted to go home because we were getting sunburnt it was so fun swimming with my friends but ween we got home we had tea and then we went to the supermarket and got some lollies and ice cream for dartre but when we were paying yazmin's mum rang and said do not pay because she got us frozen yogurt so we ran out and got in yazmin’s mum’s car we went to the frozen yogurt it was amazing!. Ween we got to my house misty-rose vomited outside then my dad said “i’m going to work and i will be home at 9:00 ok”
Chapter 3
It was 7:00 at night and misty-rose had to go home and azmin was staying at my house for the night. I was so happy that she was staying.
The next morning
It was the next morning and yazmin had no clouse and it was my birthday and mum and yazmin went shopping without me so i was at home with dad but dad got called into work, so i had to go to misty’s house. I was so bored because misty-rose was not there. But when i was going home i went to my mum’s work then it started to snow i was so cold….
Kia Ora Nevaeh.
ReplyDeleteI'd probably wet my pants rather than pee in the swamp.I'd be too worried that something might bite me on the butt!.
There are some scary creatures in the swamp.
Maybe next time you could go and see if Shrek was at home and use his toilet.I hear he lives in the swamp.